Sunday, April 6, 2014

The Sunday Scene: Patsy Collins


Alright! So starting off our first Sunday Scene is Patsy Collins. And in her own words, Patsy tells us why she's drawn to this particular scene: I like the following scene because I usually write ‘nice’ stuff and this was the first darker story I was happy with. Also the location reminds me of somewhere I went as a child - it’s one of those memories where you can’t recall details, but still retain the feeling.

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It was enough. I wanted her to go into the water, so she would go in. I said I would protect her; she was no longer afraid. She took off her shoes and stockings. With skirts bunched in her hands she strode boldly in.

"Can you see our future, Esther?"

“Won’t I just see my own?”

“We are the same, you’ll see for both of us.”

I stood right on the bank urging her forward, to go in deeper.

“What do you see?”

“I see silver and gold in the ripples, perhaps that means riches?”

“Go further Esther, you must see more. Look for our souls, reach out for our dreams.”

“I see shadows and shapes. I don’t know what they mean.”

“Step out from among the reeds, go deeper where it runs clear. All our wishes are washing away. Hold on to them. Wade into our future. Reach out and save our souls before they’re swept away.”

The reeds were thick and coarse. They wrapped around Esther’s legs. She lifted her skirts higher. She kicked her legs. Struggled to pull free. The current was strong. She fell. The water soaked into her clothing, weighing her down. She stretched her arm to me in silent, trusting appeal. I reached out to her. My fingers brushed against hers. The two that had been cut to separate us were joined again for the last time. I watched her head go under. I saw her fight for freedom, then her panic was over and she was still.

My hand that touched hers was wet. My feet were dry. I watched for a long time. The current rocked her body with a steady pulse, but didn’t take her away from me.


{Image courtesy of rebloggy.com}

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Who-o-a-a! If that wasn't creepy and evocative, I don't know what is! The rest of the story(along with others) is available as a free download from Alfie Dog Fiction in Patsy's collection, Not a Drop to Drink. You can also find it on Amazon, where Patsy says- depending on the phases of the moon or some other system I can't understand- it's sometimes free. Nice! =) You can find Patsy on her blog: Patsy Collins- Words About Writing and Writing About Words

So I think Patsy really kicked off The Sunday Scene w/a great one! As of right now, there are no other submissions scheduled. But that can quickly change! Remember, this is open for published or unpublished writers, and can be a cut scene, or even a current scene that you're super proud of. To view guidelines for submitting, go here.

And lastly, thanks to Patsy for sharing on The Sunday Scene!

27 comments:

  1. He just watched he die. Now I want to know why he did that.

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    1. I know! And I'm very curious about their severed fingers too...

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    2. Interesting you thought the narrator was a man, Alex. It's not, but you're spot on about the motive.

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  2. Great scene! Can't wait to read the next Sunday scene. What a great way to showcase writers.

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  3. Not only the scene, but "Writing Without Words" is mysterious and evocative. Both made me feel lost...

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    1. When starting my blog, I tried to come up with a nifty title, but got nothin'. =) I like Patsy's play between the words.

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  4. Great scene. Waiting eagerly for next Sunday's scene!

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    1. Thanks, Nas! Me too! (I hope there is one...) =)

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  5. Creepy scene. Awesome imagery.

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    1. Imagery! That's the word I was looking for!

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  6. Nice imagery and yes it makes me want to read more.

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    1. That's the best thing any writer can hope for, isn't it? =)

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    2. Thanks, Storyjuggler (love that name - I feel like one of those at times.)

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  7. Thanks for featurung me, Leandra.

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  8. *shivers* Yeah, that was creepy. Pretty powerful scene there. I can see why she likes it.

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  9. That is one seriously awesome scene! I love the richness of it :) I can definitely see why Patsy liked it so much!

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